Today’s challenge, is based on a new craft resource, in the form of an essay by Julie Marie Wade on description in poetry.
The prompt focuses on the use of concrete nouns and specific details, using the idea of “putting a dog in it.” Today, we challenge you to write a poem that is about something abstract – perhaps an ideal like “beauty” or “justice,” but which discusses or describes that abstraction in the form of relentlessly concrete nouns. Adjectives are fine too! Concrete details like those can draw the reader in and let them imagine the real world where your abstract ideal or feeling happens.
My poem for today is on the feeling of “Longing”. As readers, do let me know if you feel the anguish.
You’ve barely just been gone,
And I know I must stand strong,
Until you walk back in again,
But its driving me insane…
My heart’s a turmoil,
A lone boat moored on soft soil,
Rushing rivers that promise to wash away,
Stormy waters that threaten to fray…
The sound of returning foot-steps, I eagerly await,
A little child looking beyond the gigantic school gate,
I strain to hear them but they grow faint,
Solitude, my companion, I need acquaint…
Heaviness creeps in, its tentacles encircling,
Engulfed in smoke, a fire-man choking,
A leaf holding on to a tree stripped bare,
Family albums starved as Silverfish dare…
Those dark dungeons of longing, I strive to break free,
Vast, blue skies, the birds and the bees ; I look up to see,
This too shall pass like changing seasons and tides in the sea,
I await your return, when again together we shall be…
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So beautiful. Lovely words
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You describe longing with so much beauty, Smitha. I could always feel the words tugging at my heartstrings.
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Your comment makes me believe the best poems are the ones that come straight from the heart. Thank you so much. Your words are the perfect response to this poem. XXX
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It takes so much commitment to come up with something with a mere prompt and that too when you do it with the passion you possess, Smitha. Hats off to you for that. I have not dared to take up such a challenge, not up until now. It sure keeps your creative well brimming.
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It definitely takes a toll and by the 10th day I’m saying, I shouldn’t ever take it up again. Then somebody’s comment comes along like a message from God and I carry on… But, its a wonderful learning. The prompts are so creative. Pranitha your comments are encouraging. ❤
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Your doing wonderful but I hope you don’t stress about it. Enjoy!
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Thx Pranitha!
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Longing…..so beautifully put to words! Each line laden with emotion. Well done Smitha 👏
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Thank you very much Radhika. I love the way you weave words so this appreciation means a lot to me.Xxx
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Wow! This was so beautiful! All emotions poured in one post. Very moving!
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Thank you, thank you so much Vandana. Had to get over being obsessed about the exams😉. From a fellow poet, I’m humbled.
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Ha ha…You are most welcome. This was quite moving piece 🙂
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Came from the heart…missing hubby😊.
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I could sense it 🤗🤗🤗
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😍😘got the hugs
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Beautiful lines
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Thank you so much Sunith.
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Family albums starved👌
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Thanks😊 Kashiana.
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Wooow beautiful write Smitha 😊
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Thank you so much Preethi.Xxx.
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Again a loop of clapping post…you have defined longing wonderfully…
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So much appreciation…now I’m spoilt. Thank you Sangbad. Your comments are truly encouraging.
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